Sleeping Valor

o_O Color? *sees the whole thing as a movie in her head* ^_^ I very much liked the story, it was excellent. At first Paul's place in the story seemed ...

Don't you mean "He, being the object of my affection, is so graceful and talented..."? And it looks good to me, but then again that's because I assume you mean ...

I just read the Warrior Heir too, I didn't realise there was more though. I'll have to go looking for the rest. =P I thought the book was good and ...

He just watched the scariest movie , he had ever seen. remove the comma Chris hated scary movies, so why did he watch that one? He didn’t know. Were adults ...

There are those who are well-off in this world with great jobs that carry them through life, and those who have jobs that pay the bills, and not much is ...

Baby carrots is out. =P The rest is amusing, better than the first part. The added description I makes it about ten times better. And yes, if you are going ...

Ok, I love Stephanie Meyer and worship the paper she writes on, but I won't lie; this was amusing. There, pat on the back done. It's pretyt hard to critique ...

You definitely need to go more into detail. The story looks good but it's as if we're listening to an audio recording, almost; you hear their voices but you don't ...

^_^ Finally got to read this. Looks good! He's not like I expected him to be but he has my aproval. I do have some comments though (now that I ...

The story looks good but I feel rushed to finish it because of the current spacing. Please please please space out the paragraphs more! I usually just ignore stories that ...

>.< Read this after Chapter 1. I'm off to bed, but I will definitely come back her and give you come comments (since I actually think I might have some ...

It's the kind of story I have in my head, fast paced and fun. BUT, I'm not feeling it. (since there is only a paragraph I will be more critical ...

A chapter per thread is a good idea. I always find when people post long stories it's harder to convince myself to read because it seems so daunting and it's ...

It's a very nice poem, it has a beautoful sound to it. ^_^ I enjoyed reading it. The world slows down, all is still, The hopes and dreams we'll never ...

Just some suggestions... the boy grabbed a flashlight from off the counter and tucked it away in the sweatpants he was wearing . Opening the sliding glass door and exposing ...